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PostSubject: Story Discussion   Mon Sep 14, 2009 5:50 pm

discussion 4 the rory story. lol. rhyming

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PostSubject: Re: Story Discussion   Mon Sep 14, 2009 7:29 pm

Haha! I absolutely love this - it's so different to everything you've written before, absolutely shows your range as a writer. I love the character as well, he's a total asshole but perfectly pitched. I hate this stereotype of all gay guys either being best friends with one another, or all screwing, or all bitching cos they secretly fancy each other. Or at least, have them all as nice guys. It's like stage 3 of prejudice - first comes hatred/disgust/inferiority, then comes stereotypes, then comes super-niceness. It's like people compensate for other people's prejudices by acting like every minority they know is great, so they won't be labelled prejudiced. I'm glad that you created a character that bucks that trend.
Rant aside, I can see a lot of potential for humour and good plots in this that you couldn't have in your other stories, just because the characters aren't suited to it. Keep up the fantastic work, you're becoming a regular comicality with the increasing number of great stories!

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PostSubject: Re: Story Discussion   Mon Sep 14, 2009 9:39 pm

I completely agree with Alex; the fact that this guy is such a departure from all your other characters makes him really nice. Definately a nice change.

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PostSubject: Re: Story Discussion   Tue Sep 15, 2009 3:23 am

like i said, i really like it. it just might over take NAJ from my listing or whatever. i just dont remember the things that cam into my mind when i sneaked a peek at it... Neutral
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PostSubject: Re: Story Discussion   Tue Sep 15, 2009 4:01 pm

glad u guys like it so much! hopefully, writing this will help me a lil bit w/ the others, kinda get me bak into a rythem or sumthin. i look 4ward 2 writing it

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PostSubject: Re: Story Discussion   Mon Nov 09, 2009 6:55 pm

chaptah 2 nah awaits yah ahs

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PostSubject: Re: Story Discussion   Mon Nov 09, 2009 7:44 pm

What a happy little party of dysfunction we have here. I love it, the drugs, the angry uncle, the ex that won't give the fuck up, its all so much darker and grittier than your other works. Reminds me of the psycho family down the street in every neighbourhood; you can't help but watch the trainwreck of familial infighting

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PostSubject: Re: Story Discussion   Mon Nov 09, 2009 11:37 pm

whos the ex that wont give up?

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PostSubject: Re: Story Discussion   Mon Nov 09, 2009 11:44 pm

C'est Caleb, n'est pas mon ami?

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PostSubject: Re: Story Discussion   Tue Nov 10, 2009 2:14 am

Rory is new to this part of town or whatever, i dont think he has an in this area. i think i like this story much better than all your other ones. mainly coz, no matter what happens in the other, there is the sense of 'things wont go awfully wrong' here you have the feeling of shit keeps on happening over and over again. and something like hypothermia brining out the conflict in his family and in just one sentence is awesome! i still dont know what this story is completely about. about rory, duh, but what about rory? him finding a BF hasnt played a big role in here, why?
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PostSubject: Re: Story Discussion   Tue Nov 10, 2009 5:25 pm

as of now, the story is about rory getting used 2 his surroundings & being helped along w/ his partner (at this point trent) so he can live in yet another area that his uncle has dragged him 2. as of now hes not seeing seattle as a home, hes seeing it as another rest stop.

caleb is NOT 1 of rorys ex boyfriends. idk where u got that idea from. AND ENOUGH FRENCH

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PostSubject: Re: Story Discussion   Tue Nov 10, 2009 6:54 pm

mah bad regarding Caleb.

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PostSubject: Re: Story Discussion   Fri Nov 13, 2009 1:05 am

yup

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PostSubject: Re: Story Discussion   Wed Dec 16, 2009 6:13 pm

An All New Chapter of 'Rory' Posted Right Now! Right Here on Kabe!

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PostSubject: Re: Story Discussion   Thu Dec 17, 2009 10:45 am

When I first saw the title of this chapter, I thought of Microsoft Windows lol
Anyway... I like this story, it has a brutality that I don't think I've ever seen in a gay story - at least not from this perspective. Some of it is kinda dark, like the cigarette butt in the eye moment, or the 'leather belt to the face'; but then you contrast that with lines like "Next to pepsi, cum is my favorite drink" lmfao!
I feel kinda sorry for Caleb, the guy sounds nice enough but loses out just for being more politically conscious/idealistic than Rory, who let's face it is a right asshole really. But I guess that's realistic for you.
What I wonder is how the story will progress. In the long term, are we going to be seeing Rory go on some kinda journey as a character and become more relaxed and perhaps more accepting of himself (I dunno how much he's really OK with who and what he is) or what other kinda direction is this going in? I suppose that's part of the suspense that keeps us reading. Ah well, keep it up, love it as always! Very Happy

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PostSubject: Re: Story Discussion   Fri Dec 18, 2009 4:55 pm

thanks alex. i think ive alredy sed this, but u hav sum of the best feedbacks. i love it Very Happy

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PostSubject: Re: Story Discussion   Fri Dec 18, 2009 8:04 pm

Hmmmm, I'm not actually sure what to say about the chapter, so pardon me if this rambles a bit.
I do appreciate the grittier style of writing that you're using for the story, its definate contrast from the middle class good boy perspective you used in the other three stories and I think the change in perspective really suits the characters. Speaking of the characters, it feels like you've given them a lot more depth in this story, they're more than just regular kids who go to school and go through the motions of daily life; they have more things going against them in life and it makes them much more real. Like just from this chapter, you brought out the fact that Trent's family was less than fully supportive of his sexual orientation, or at least the sexual acts that come with it. This is something that people really do face and I think its good that you're willing to portray a character with those kinds of problems instead of having nothing but characters with totally supportive families and who live in some kind of universe in which there's no kind of societal problem from being gay, because we know for a fact that some people do have problems in their communities because of who they like. Obviously it was a pretty hot sex scene you added in the chapter, and even the sex didn't seem cliched or predictable.
I like where you're going with this story, keep it up Kell.

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PostSubject: Re: Story Discussion   Fri Dec 18, 2009 8:08 pm

ya know wat sucks? wen u write a sex scene, u dont get off on it cuz YER the 1 writing it & u hafta think of ways 2 phrase things & that can take from a few seconds 2 a couple minutes lol. & in that time, yer not even turned on that much cuz yer busy writing it lol. so sumtimes i need....inspiration Very Happy lol

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PostSubject: Re: Story Discussion   Fri Dec 18, 2009 8:08 pm

oh & thanks 4 the comments Smile

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PostSubject: Re: Story Discussion   Tue Dec 22, 2009 11:46 am

Looks like im a bit late but whatever. Like i said before the roughness of the story is like the best part. I really want caleb to sexed up in the story lol. He is the typical nice guy but he keeps on trying. Why cant he take a hint? Not that im complaining about the sex lol. Anyway it was awesome chapter.
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PostSubject: Re: Story Discussion   Tue Dec 22, 2009 5:35 pm

who sez caleb is trying nething? maybe hes just a nice boy

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PostSubject: Re: Story Discussion   Fri Feb 19, 2010 7:37 pm

kay guyz. new rory chaptah, so les talk abaht it Very Happy

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PostSubject: Re: Story Discussion   Fri Feb 19, 2010 8:33 pm

The accent doesn't suit you KellKell.

As for the chapter, I actually quite liked it. I know Rory's supposed to be a bit darker a character than your other stories, but it was nice to see that not everything he does is based on self-interest and distrust of others. The whole love-hate dynamic he has with Caleb is pretty interesting, and it would be pretty cool if you could delve into that a bit more, maybe just seeing how things turn out with them, since there's apparently some kind of attraction between the two of them, whether Rory wants to admit it or not.

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PostSubject: Re: Story Discussion   Fri Feb 19, 2010 10:29 pm

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PostSubject: Re: Story Discussion   Sat Feb 20, 2010 1:03 am

I still don't understand why Rory doesn't like Caleb.
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