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PostSubject: Corey and Evan Discussion   Thu Nov 13, 2008 11:44 pm

Just discuss the story here!
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PostSubject: Re: Corey and Evan Discussion   Thu Nov 13, 2008 11:45 pm

love it, seriously i do
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PostSubject: Re: Corey and Evan Discussion   Sat Nov 15, 2008 5:31 am

man that was real good!!!! i really loved it. too bad corey has to wait untiil MONDAY!!!! (is quantum of solace out in theatres already???) in the beginning i really liked the part where corey was actually talking to the reader that was really nice but later it kinda didnt happen again. that for me was definitely the best part where the writing is concerned, i also notice that you had given alot of detail to one of the teacher's desk (wonder why??), looks like you were planning on this for a very long time. all in all i really liked it man!!!! keep up the good work.

(ill try and keep my posts shorter next time silent silent )
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PostSubject: Re: Corey and Evan Discussion   Sat Nov 15, 2008 11:46 am

No write longer ones! Anyways, I wrote the entire thing in about an 1.5 hours...and I didn't plan out anything beforehand other than their names. I'm going to post Chapter 2 sometime today. Do you think the romance ended up a bit cheesy? I've never tried to write any kind of love story, and I don't want it to sound cheesy. I want it so sound involved and intricate. Just wait until you see what I HAVE actually planned out Wink

Oh and don't worry. There'll be more "flashback" type references in the next chapter. And it'll be longer.
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PostSubject: Re: Corey and Evan Discussion   Sat Nov 15, 2008 3:57 pm

I thought it was really well-written Staile. All I can say is that if you're going to use flashback scenes, use them tastefully and don't just drop them into the story at random places.
Looking forward to seeing your next chapter.
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PostSubject: Re: Corey and Evan Discussion   Sun Nov 16, 2008 1:31 am

1st kiss in the rain is pretty hot. lol
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PostSubject: Re: Corey and Evan Discussion   Mon Nov 17, 2008 12:43 am

define cheesy. but anyways i felt kinda 'left out' when he just took off in the green car. i know that he might've had no choice but just leaving corey out there was kinda.... idk. they should've atleast exchanged phone numbers. i mean how long will that take???? so yeah....
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PostSubject: Re: Corey and Evan Discussion   Mon Nov 17, 2008 1:36 am

Ephraim, remember they're classmates so they've probably already exchanged phone numbers.
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PostSubject: Re: Corey and Evan Discussion   Mon Nov 17, 2008 1:43 am

i second that
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PostSubject: Re: Corey and Evan Discussion   Mon Nov 17, 2008 7:47 am

Which one do you second? How they are classmates and probably have each other's numbers? or how Evan should have given Corey his phone number or something?

Don't worry though as what happens (only next) has been planned out. I haven't planned out the entire story, I mean, but the next chapter is ready to be typed out.
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PostSubject: Re: Corey and Evan Discussion   Mon Nov 17, 2008 4:38 pm

they shud alredy hav the #'s
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PostSubject: Re: Corey and Evan Discussion   Sun Nov 23, 2008 3:51 am

wow, that's pretty harsh that people were acting like that at the end of the chapter.
Nice new chapter mate, keep em comin.
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PostSubject: Re: Corey and Evan Discussion   Sun Nov 23, 2008 3:59 pm

haha i like where he dus the whole box thing, w/ nuthin in it. it was pretty funny. i hav a question though. how old r they again?
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PostSubject: Re: Corey and Evan Discussion   Sun Nov 23, 2008 4:24 pm

i dont know how old they are.

16 and 17 i suppose.
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PostSubject: Re: Corey and Evan Discussion   Sun Nov 23, 2008 11:16 pm

ok i wud hope so, considering they drive
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PostSubject: Re: Corey and Evan Discussion   Tue Nov 25, 2008 1:21 am

in the beginning i thought that tha story was not progressing but the last part where people shout 'fags' it really showed that there's something more to come. and i liked it alot. especially the part where you talk about there kiss (it was kinda like a monolouge) it was really really romantic. i really liked it. good work man!!!!
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PostSubject: Re: Corey and Evan Discussion   Sun Feb 01, 2009 1:52 am

it was pretty short, and i thought there'll be more of why they just drifted apart, but as usual the sex was pretty hot. but nothing more than that.
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PostSubject: Re: Corey and Evan Discussion   Sun Feb 01, 2009 1:57 am

i agree. but i think im more content w/ the sex than ephriam is. waaaay more content...lol

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PostSubject: Re: Corey and Evan Discussion   Sun Feb 01, 2009 8:09 pm

Haha, don't worry, more will be explained soon.

And the sex will be much more detailed. Smile
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PostSubject: Re: Corey and Evan Discussion   Sun Feb 01, 2009 8:14 pm

great lol

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PostSubject: Re: Corey and Evan Discussion   Sun Feb 01, 2009 8:55 pm

You... do want more and better sex, right?

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PostSubject: Re: Corey and Evan Discussion   Sun Feb 01, 2009 9:11 pm

no comment. lol. but yes, i do

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PostSubject: Re: Corey and Evan Discussion   Mon Feb 02, 2009 4:03 am

naturally yes, boy!!!
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PostSubject: Re: Corey and Evan Discussion   Mon Feb 02, 2009 9:06 am

Just in case no one noticed, I extended chapter 3 because I felt it was too short.

Chapter 4 might come today or tomorrow. And it'll be about the same length that chapter 3 is right now or longer.

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PostSubject: Re: Corey and Evan Discussion   Mon Feb 02, 2009 1:10 pm

the extension was quite interesting. obviously there are going to some interesting consequences... i hope. anyways it was really nice to know a little more about evan's past too. who knew that he had a gf too??? at least an ex. i liked the extension more than the main part actually.
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