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PostSubject: Study Date (Discussion)   Wed Dec 11, 2013 2:24 pm

my first short story! took me a couple months to write it, but hopefully it turned out ok. im sure in time, my writing will change when i write short stories as opposed to my stories, but for now, i just hope it didnt get too boring in the beginning haha

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PostSubject: Re: Study Date (Discussion)   Sat Dec 14, 2013 12:13 am

I really enjoyed this story.

You are a great writter!

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PostSubject: Re: Study Date (Discussion)   Sat Dec 14, 2013 12:29 am

hello!

thank you very much!

goodbye..

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PostSubject: Re: Study Date (Discussion)   Wed Dec 18, 2013 4:45 am

I liked it. The nerd and the jock is a nice setup and I'm glad you didn't make it too emotionally heavy. I've read a lot of stories on nifty and so on where the writer sets up an erotic story and ends up using it to deal with their issues from their teenage years. It's nice to just get some well written sexy stuff.

I know what you mean about style changing for short stories, they present an opportunity to explore themes which would be really challenging in a longer work and that's very freeing. I look forward to seeing what you put out next :-)

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PostSubject: Re: Study Date (Discussion)   Wed Dec 18, 2013 7:00 am

It was really good! Very well done! You obviously have done quite a bit of research for this one. not only on the fishy things but also on self defence and what not. It was really good! That said, I have to ask this: how much of the sex scenes do you write from personal experience? i.e. if at all.
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PostSubject: Re: Study Date (Discussion)   Wed Dec 18, 2013 2:24 pm

none lol. and for the wrestling stuff, i just closed my eyes & wrote out what i was imagining. for the fishy stuff, i already knew that stuff because im obsessed with wikipedia journeying & so i had learned that crap on my own a few months prior. figured i could put some of my random trivial knowledge to good use lol.

trev told me he thought it was a little long in terms of getting down to the main part of the story, which is obviously the sex. and i know what he meant. going back & reading it, i felt like maybe i DID put in a tiny bit too much of a setup.

but thats why i need more feedback, so i can make future shit better.

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PostSubject: Re: Study Date (Discussion)   Sat Dec 21, 2013 8:21 am

I think this shit was good.
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PostSubject: Re: Study Date (Discussion)   Mon May 05, 2014 3:11 am

well thank u lol

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PostSubject: Re: Study Date (Discussion)   Sun Jul 06, 2014 3:45 am

just re-read it again. and i cant believe how many times i had moderately rapey vibes in there with nate being a bit too forward xP lol

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