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+26modernecstasy luvnrock theviper2288 Raine marcuss ... Shauni Evilpanda DreamCatcher Milo Dannyboi charlezmatthew nicks18 Mr. Mike Ecii rando88 b20vcrxsir orion91 Sabazius Staile Billy88 No Answer xxdarrynashleyxx painservedcold ems Kell 30 posters |
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Kell Admin
Posts : 3509 Join date : 2008-10-05
| Subject: Re: Overall story discussion Sun Mar 28, 2010 8:25 pm | |
| No problem | |
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Kell Admin
Posts : 3509 Join date : 2008-10-05
| Subject: Re: Overall story discussion Thu Apr 29, 2010 4:02 pm | |
| a new nat for all of thou | |
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painservedcold
Posts : 842 Join date : 2008-11-07 Age : 34 Location : Canada
| Subject: Re: Overall story discussion Thu Apr 29, 2010 7:28 pm | |
| AWKWARD AWKWARD chapter ending. Yikes! There's just no way that this is going to end well. | |
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Kell Admin
Posts : 3509 Join date : 2008-10-05
| Subject: Re: Overall story discussion Thu Apr 29, 2010 7:31 pm | |
| lol
the other conflict, trev, that i was thinkin of using was nick wud be forced 2 out taylor bcuz ppl were bullying him & threatening him & that sorta stuff. but i went w/ this instead | |
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ems
Posts : 2553 Join date : 2008-11-07 Age : 33
| Subject: Re: Overall story discussion Fri Apr 30, 2010 10:06 am | |
| yes, it must've been awkward lol. so did ted see taylor too? that might be a problem. | |
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Kell Admin
Posts : 3509 Join date : 2008-10-05
| Subject: Re: Overall story discussion Fri Apr 30, 2010 5:34 pm | |
| i wud assume he saw taylor. i mean they were right there | |
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ems
Posts : 2553 Join date : 2008-11-07 Age : 33
| Subject: Re: Overall story discussion Sat May 01, 2010 2:31 am | |
| its not clear that he saw taylor. i mean, taylor could have been like 10ft. from nick and when he heard nick say "Ted?!" he could've run and hidden himself behind the sofa or something lol. but the thing is, he cant play the 'i was just hanging with him card-- shirtless' lol. i think im going to like the next chapter lol. | |
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Kell Admin
Posts : 3509 Join date : 2008-10-05
| Subject: Re: Overall story discussion Sat May 01, 2010 2:32 pm | |
| Taylor rolled his eyes, walked over to me & wrapped his arm around my waist.
I opened the door, both of us shirtless, when I saw the warmest green eyes staring back at me. But it wasn't the eyes that I nearly dropped my jaw over.
there. | |
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ems
Posts : 2553 Join date : 2008-11-07 Age : 33
| Subject: Re: Overall story discussion Sat May 01, 2010 4:23 pm | |
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Kell Admin
Posts : 3509 Join date : 2008-10-05
| Subject: Re: Overall story discussion Tue Jun 08, 2010 4:42 pm | |
| dun dun dun duuuuuuuuun. new nat chap | |
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Sabazius
Posts : 676 Join date : 2008-11-13 Age : 32 Location : Sheffield
| Subject: Re: Overall story discussion Wed Jun 09, 2010 4:02 am | |
| Lo-lo-lo-love TRIANGLE! Lol. Anyway, I like this! Ted's not a clearly cut character, neither good nor bad - he's just in an awkward place and making things complicated, which is a realism I like. Also, I'm amused by the gay msn advice swapping that goes on with Mike, since that's pretty much my conversations with Trev haha. Great chapter, really looking forward to seeing how this will impact on Nick and Taylor's relationship, keep it up! | |
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painservedcold
Posts : 842 Join date : 2008-11-07 Age : 34 Location : Canada
| Subject: Re: Overall story discussion Wed Jun 09, 2010 5:54 am | |
| Rofl. Alex, our conversations don't ALWAYS get like that. Just most of them <3. Seriously though, this could end up being all sorts of good fun for the story. BRING ON THE DRAMA LLAMA! | |
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ems
Posts : 2553 Join date : 2008-11-07 Age : 33
| Subject: Re: Overall story discussion Wed Jun 09, 2010 2:00 pm | |
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DreamCatcher
Posts : 408 Join date : 2010-01-02 Age : 30 Location : Wuconda IL
| Subject: Re: Overall story discussion Tue Aug 03, 2010 4:34 pm | |
| Sneaky closet queer boyfriend of mine best quote ever | |
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Kell Admin
Posts : 3509 Join date : 2008-10-05
| Subject: Re: Overall story discussion Tue Aug 03, 2010 4:38 pm | |
| wow for a second i was like wtf r u talking-ohhhh wait i think i said that in the chapter haha
well if you havent read it yet, then read the newest chapter or u can die or whatever. so yeah lets talk shall we?
this chapter was fluff. im in a little bit of a writers block & even though i know where im going, GETTING there is a little tricky. so yes i KNOW this wasnt a great chapter, but watevs | |
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Sabazius
Posts : 676 Join date : 2008-11-13 Age : 32 Location : Sheffield
| Subject: Re: Overall story discussion Tue Aug 03, 2010 7:06 pm | |
| Id hardly say it's fluff - if anything this is buildup to a grand collision of forces within the story. I thought this chapter was a good advance to the story, and I loved the 'What else could POSSIBLY go wrong?' at the end, cheeky little poke at us readers there I WOULD say that I thought one line of dialogue was a little unrealistic: - Quote :
- "Well maybe a Bible & few smacks will bring him around. I'm not having that boy's life ruined just because some little fag wants him to do Lord knows what with him & keeps him away from what matters. I'll have him stay after Mass for a few hours each Sunday."
I think it's just the way that he treated violence so casually was at odds with how a person like this would like to be perceived. Just a minor quibble, but I thought you'd appreciate the constructive criticism. The mother, on the other hand, was a very well-sculpted character, I could practically feel the venom dripping from her mouth as I read the dialogue. Keep it up! | |
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Evilpanda
Posts : 95 Join date : 2009-10-25 Age : 27 Location : Utah
| Subject: Re: Overall story discussion Wed Aug 04, 2010 3:14 am | |
| Nice foreshadowing, Nick dropped the magazine, then later asks, what could possibly go wrong | |
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Kell Admin
Posts : 3509 Join date : 2008-10-05
| Subject: Re: Overall story discussion Wed Aug 04, 2010 3:21 am | |
| ohhhhh i wish i had placed a bet on that alex, cuz i KNEW u were gonna pick up on that piece of dialogue lol. and i COMPLETELY agree. i wanna find a balance between abusive in the biblical sense & realistic but its a little hard. so i might edit that dialogue at sum point. and yes alex, i appreciate the constructive criticism lol | |
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ems
Posts : 2553 Join date : 2008-11-07 Age : 33
| Subject: Re: Overall story discussion Wed Aug 04, 2010 4:07 am | |
| wow, alex, thats some detail that you were looking into! and good job kell, like alex said, the last sentence was awesome, i felt like we should expect more shit lol. | |
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Kell Admin
Posts : 3509 Join date : 2008-10-05
| Subject: Re: Overall story discussion Wed Aug 04, 2010 4:16 am | |
| - ems wrote:
- i felt like we should expect more shit lol.
i love you for that roflmao | |
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Shauni
Posts : 8 Join date : 2010-08-06 Age : 30 Location : Ireland
| Subject: Re: Overall story discussion Fri Aug 06, 2010 4:40 pm | |
| I just finished the 14 chapters...then decided to join Really loved all the ideas and can't wait to read more on Nick & Taylor | |
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Kell Admin
Posts : 3509 Join date : 2008-10-05
| Subject: Re: Overall story discussion Fri Aug 06, 2010 5:49 pm | |
| well thank u shauni im glad ya liked | |
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Sabazius
Posts : 676 Join date : 2008-11-13 Age : 32 Location : Sheffield
| Subject: Re: Overall story discussion Sat Aug 07, 2010 8:40 am | |
| Welcome Shauni! As Official Welcomer, I'd like to welcome you to KBB! We hope you'll stick around and converse with all of our lovely members, please feel free to post an introduction in the relevant thread, and if you're daring, a photo in the member pics thread. We're all very friendly, and if you've got any questions, feel free to direct them to myself (Alex) or to dare de-vil (Kellen), our EVIL OVERLORD | |
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Kell Admin
Posts : 3509 Join date : 2008-10-05
| Subject: Re: Overall story discussion Sun Aug 08, 2010 12:45 am | |
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Sabazius
Posts : 676 Join date : 2008-11-13 Age : 32 Location : Sheffield
| Subject: Re: Overall story discussion Sun Aug 08, 2010 7:03 am | |
| - dare de-vil wrote:
- evil? dont flatter me
Well what would you prefer, mildly annoying? | |
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