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PostSubject: Re: Story Discussion   Mon Jun 13, 2011 11:57 pm

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should i be flattered?

Yes, yes you should. It was a wonderful chapter, and not just for the sexual imagery involved. Though that was hot too.
I actually appreciated that you took the time to delve into the personalities of the characters a bit. You're really starting to show a difference between Caleb and Trent, and I think that makes the situation more real and something we can relate to as readers.
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PostSubject: Re: Story Discussion   Tue Jun 14, 2011 12:03 am

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did you have the same finishing reaction?

oh most definitely Wink
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PostSubject: Re: Story Discussion   Tue Jun 14, 2011 12:20 am

i miss reviews. i should write more often! haha

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PostSubject: Re: Story Discussion   Tue Jun 14, 2011 8:02 am

If I were in Caleb's shoes, I wouldn't be pitying Rory for his lack of love. If/when he finds someone he cares about enough then he might change his mind, but honestly I'm slightly envious of his attitude to sex. I'm not at all good at separating sex from emotion and just fucking someone because they're cute. As long as nobody's getting hurt...

This chapter was a good mix of sex, action and serious character exposition. I thought you managed to get some quite serious stuff in there without letting their conversation become unrealistic for the setting. I also like how neither Caleb or Trent are being portrayed as perfect characters. Rory is a really morally ambiguous protagonist and it's great that the rest of the characters aren't divided into good and bad - it's a complex story that doesn't necessarily have sides or a simple solution Smile

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PostSubject: Re: Story Discussion   Tue Jun 14, 2011 12:55 pm

how do u DO that? how do u always know what to say?

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PostSubject: Re: Story Discussion   Wed Jun 15, 2011 4:33 am

i had a boner after that... but i was jacking off before i started it Very Happy
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PostSubject: Re: Story Discussion   Thu Jun 16, 2011 7:15 pm

dare de-vil wrote:
how do u DO that? how do u always know what to say?
I'm just a genius, you know Razz
Seriously though, writing and analysing the universe is pretty much what I do with my life, so I'd like to think I have some talent for self-expression. I just also happen to enjoy your stories immensely Smile

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i had a boner after that... but i was jacking off before i started it Very Happy
Wow... I knew Kell enjoyed my feedback, but I had no idea I had this effect on other people too!



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PostSubject: Re: Story Discussion   Fri Jun 17, 2011 5:19 pm

to put it bluntly kell... i had such a hardon that i was forced to do naughty things to your master piece....please write more<3
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PostSubject: Re: Story Discussion   Fri Jun 17, 2011 6:11 pm

I'm flattered

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PostSubject: Re: Story Discussion   Fri Jun 17, 2011 10:09 pm

you should be bc technically YOUR getting me of<3 ...like i said PLEASE write more<3
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PostSubject: Re: Story Discussion   Tue Jun 21, 2011 3:20 am

so i just went through my inbox to clean some stuff & i started writing chapter 10 on march 26th lol

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PostSubject: Re: Story Discussion   Wed Aug 10, 2011 4:30 am

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you should be bc technically YOUR getting me of<3 ...like i said PLEASE write more<3

wait what? lol

i dont remember that comment lol. im glad u gave u a cybergasm lol

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PostSubject: Re: Story Discussion   Fri Sep 30, 2011 4:32 am

YAY! A NEW CHAPTER!

In seriousness, you've intrigued me with his mom coming back, and what that could possibly mean for Rory. I mean, at the very least, that's another person always trying to figure out where he is or what he's doing or who he's doing it with, so that'll make it harder to be with either boy.
You almost have to feel bad for Trent in a situation like this. He's so...idk, not naive or trusting. I guess he's very much a romantic at heart, and he's getting played by someone who he knew would play him, and that he agreed that they should not get attached to each other. That never happens in real life, someone always gets attached and the situation ruins itself, so good on you for keeping the realism up for that part of the chapter.
I predict family abuse in the future, it's just too volatile a situation you're creating.
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PostSubject: Re: Story Discussion   Fri Sep 30, 2011 11:48 am

so yar there be a new chapter to- OHH WHOA! trev ya beat me to it pirat


child abuse huh? hmm. innerestin'

so which problem do u guys think is gonna be worse?

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PostSubject: Re: Story Discussion   Fri Sep 30, 2011 12:30 pm

love triangle. Easily. After all, he already put up with the uncle for years upon years
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PostSubject: Re: Story Discussion   Fri Sep 30, 2011 1:10 pm

I doubt there'll be any sort of love triangle. Like Trev said, Trent looks like he's very romantic at heart and he would break it off. At least that what I think.
Anyway Kell, it's quite a good chapter. I thought that this story will be free of all the mushy mushy stuff that comes with relationships but I guess not. I THINK I like that, not really sure. And also, I thought that his mum was dead for some reason lol. Looking forward to the next chapter. Good stuff mate!
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PostSubject: Re: Story Discussion   Fri Sep 30, 2011 1:33 pm

to be honest, before i even started writing the story, i planned on having rorys mom dead. but then like 5 months before i started the story, i was like meehhhhhh lol

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PostSubject: Re: Story Discussion   Sun Oct 02, 2011 1:30 am

Thank you keel Smile i love caleb... like ,i want to date him he's so cute...Mmmmm i just wants to cuddle<3
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PostSubject: Re: Story Discussion   Sun Oct 02, 2011 2:18 am

thanks! Very Happy

be honest guys what do u think of caleb? is he lovable or annoying? im trying to make him a lovable character to u guys but im not sure if i am though. lemme know!

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PostSubject: Re: Story Discussion   Sun Oct 02, 2011 2:48 am

I want to kiss him soooo much ...I want a caleb =(
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PostSubject: Re: Story Discussion   Sun Oct 02, 2011 3:12 am

Well, we only know him from Rory's perspective. So I think he's annoying. Like he's trying so hard but all he ends up is being annoying.
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PostSubject: Re: Story Discussion   Sun Oct 02, 2011 3:13 am

hmm....

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PostSubject: Re: Story Discussion   Tue Dec 06, 2011 3:41 am

SOOOOO?!?!?!

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PostSubject: Re: Story Discussion   Tue Dec 06, 2011 4:26 am

I SEE WHAT YOU DID THERE!

Cute, very cute. I like the plot twist. Could get physical, and twisted.
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PostSubject: Re: Story Discussion   Tue Dec 06, 2011 4:57 am

NAH-ICE! the repetition of the last two paragraphs like his life on a loop was pretty cool! Well done kellen!


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